Nov 19, 2011

Urn

Obese thoughts are clogged  
increases weight of mind, makes
heart hollow like urn


Haiku Heights
PS : Thanks to Leo for letting me know about the extra syllable in first line

14 spoke to dreamy:

  1. A most perceptive haiku. Excellent.

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  2. Extraordinary... what a take on Urn..

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  3. Intense message using the prompt!!!

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  4. true indeed, When our mind is heavy heart is no way in position to take its own stand :)

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  5. You can dig on each word. Excellent creation!

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  6. Anthony,kaykuala,Judith,Valli, Ramesh, Becca thanks ! :)

    meethimirchi, Strange, but true, both are opposites yet dependent:)

    Saru, that indeed was a compliment ! thanks:)

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  7. Isn't that so true. nice haiku.

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  8. This is very unique. And about the extra syllable ... there are those Haiku experts who do not remain strict with the 5-7-5 because the Japanese translated Haiku does not translate in that manner. Also, I never really know whether to count a word with "ed" at the end as 2 syllables. I often say it as one.

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  9. nice.....enjoyed it.....

    here is mine


    http://thealchemycritics.blogspot.com/2011/11/urn.html

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